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The charts below illustrate the proportion of the population ages in
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000, and these portions of the population ages were
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 predicted for the
year
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2050. The data is calibrated in percentage. Overall, it can be seen that in 2000, slightly over half of the population's
age
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group
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 in
Yemen
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 was below 14
years
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 old, while substantially more than half of
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group
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 in Italy was between 15-59
years
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 old.
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, the charts in 2050 from both nations were predicted to go in the same direction, that the 60 plus
age
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group
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 would increase from the
year
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 of 2000. It is apparent that the majority
age
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group
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 in
Yemen
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 was under the
age
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 of 14
years
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, at 51%, followed by the groups of 15-59
years
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 old and the 60 plus
age
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group
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, at 46.3% and 3.6% respectively, while in Italy, the largest
group
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 was from 15-59
years
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 old, at 61,6%.
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 the
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 largest proportion was from 60 plus and
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 from the below
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year
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 old
group
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, at 24.1% and 14.3%. The pie charts
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 give the prediction of the percentage of the populations of both countries in the
year
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2050. A notable point is that
Yemen
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 and Italy both have similar forecasts for the
age
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group
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 of 60 plus, which would increase. In
Yemen
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, it slightly increased from 3.6% to 5.7%, while in Italy it dramatically increased from 24.1% to 42.3%.

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