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Q) Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoid any change. others, however, think that change is always a good thing. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are many concerned individuals who feel that investing your life performing the same activity,
instead
 of focusing on multiple tasks can be hectic. While others believe that change is the only constant and we should welcome the new opportunities. I completely agree with the latter statement, and in
this
 essay, I will explain both sides of the topic. On one hand, many people prefer to have less stress in their lives,
thus
 they tend to concentrate on one job at a moment. They feel that investing your time and efforts on multiple stuff would not help you to maintain the balance and you may lose your control in both activities.
For example
, while being an IT manager, if you start investing in share markets without having any proper knowledge of shares,
then
 you may come under pressure and due to that, it becomes challenging to perform your office work. They become comfortable working on certain interests as they can be profitable to them.
However
, few public enjoys difficult situations.
Thus
 they do not value continuing relatable duties.
for instance
, If an IT engineer is good at his job but if he
also
 enjoys writing and he decides to pursue a career in that field.
Then
 can be challenging by changing the future plans but at the same time, it can turn into an amazing opportunity. It can be a big risk but as a solution, one should be good at risk management. Before moving to other streams, he should identify the advantages and disadvantages of the change, so that he can handle the worst situations. In conclusion, we should take calculative risks, so that we don't regret them later.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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