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Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others.

#people #internet #world #communities #home
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 about people who goes online and it showed
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 ratio among three countries which is
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the USA
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,
Canada
 and Mexico from 1999 to 2009. Overall, there were furious
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 between
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 and
Canada
 in their online users.
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 scored the winner
in
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 the beginning of the
period
,
Canada
 had overgrown her at the end of the
period
 by approximately 10%.
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 was the highest in 1999 by nearly 30%
although
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 had
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 it regarded their users of the Internet.
Canada
 remained
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 top from
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 to the end of the
period
.
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 tried to compete again with
Canada
 in 2005 but it failed to overcome it.
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, Mexico was out of the competition from the start as it was the lowest proportion with their Internet user and remained that way through the ten-year
period
. The average difference between it and the rest of the countries is near 50%.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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