Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Achievers
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in every field
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believed
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to be talented inherently.
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, there are a
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of individuals who gained
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in their lives by perseverance and hard
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who, even did not inherent high IQ legacy.
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, I
beleive
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believe

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that
intellegant
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intelligent

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is familial though it
doesnt
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doesn't

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guarentee
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guarantee

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victory and, determination, hard
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are the pillars of
acheiving
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achieving

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grand
sucess
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success

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even though
person
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a person
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doesn't have intelligence in the family tree.
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essay will dive into both views in detail in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, it is well said that talent
doesnt
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gaurantee
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guarantee

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success
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but hard
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does. In the society, it has been observed for ages that the children of doctors
tends
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to become doctor and so as for
polititians
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politicians

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. The reason behind
this
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is that, apart from
hereditory
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hereditary

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aspects they
also
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receives
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enormous information and guidance from their parents that
makes
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their hurdles a bit lower than common
people
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and
eventullay
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eventually

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an easy path to walk which, ensures shot
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. To illustrate, In India, the Gandhi family
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the throne for almost more than 50 years and it was a hat trick for them as their ancestors were deeply involved in politics. so, every
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successor

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of the Gandhi family became The Priminister of India till 2017.
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elucidates that
intellegant
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intelligent

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is a familial thing. Despite the fact, there are examples in various fields that
people
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gained massive acknowledgement, not because of inherent talent but due to their hard
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and constant
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efforts
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.
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, the renowned woman wrestler M C Marycom, an
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Olympic

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gold medalist,
who
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apply

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achived
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achieved

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flawless
success
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because of her strong
will power
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willpower

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and perseverance and no one in her family was a wrestler,
in addition
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to that no female of her town
as well as
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, as well as state,

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state
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the state
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was in the same field.
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, it substantiates that,
people
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can earn name and fame by their own capability and not by
mere
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merely

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inherited
intellegance
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intelligence

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. In conclusion, solid efforts, determination and
will power
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are the mandatory pathways leading to grand
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in life over innate
intelligent
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.
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from talented families can remain dormant and in failure without these key elements in their lives.

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