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The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the University. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #course #fees #study #university
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It is believed by some that the
government
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 should pay for the course
fees
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 for all of them who want to achieve a
University
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 degree. While I believe that the
government
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 should pay for a
University
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 degree, I
also
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, think that the
government
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 should pay
half
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 the
fees
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 needed. There are many reasons why the
government
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 should pay the course
fees
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 for
students
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.
Firstly
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, it benefits the nation. If the
government
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 pays
fees
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, they will get a
university
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 degree who are belonging to a poor family.
Secondly
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, it helps to develop various sectors like health,
education
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, transportation, technology, etc. To cite an example,
students
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 have enough
education
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then
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 they find new equipment, they improve machinery, they make digital transportation systems.
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, people get an
education
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then
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 they decrease poverty. Sometimes people do have not enough money to get an
education
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 at the
University
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. So, the
government
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 should help them by giving them course
fees
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.
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 but not least,
students
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 who do higher studies in a particular field, get a chance to
study
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 abroad. It helps them to make a career and they support their family.
However
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, I believe that some
students
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 do not take an
education
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 properly and it is a waste of money. While the
government
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 pays
half
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fees
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, they have to manage
half
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fees
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 by themselves and value the significance of money. If the
government
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 pays
study
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fees
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, competition will become increase. To quote an example, more people like to
study
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 abroad nowadays but the competition level is very tough compared to the past. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that
although
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 paying
study
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fees
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 for everyone by the
government
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 is acceptable, the
government
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 should pay
half
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 amount of the
fees
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.
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