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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

#rain #forests #extinction #life
Tropical forests have had been playing an indispensable part in balancing the ecosystem. A plethora of folks
assert
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 that the erosion of woodlands might push the populace and wildlife over the edge of extinction. Personally, I support the statement and presenting my views in the following paragraphs with relevant examples.
First
 and foremost, dense plantations are the sanctuaries of
animals
.
Therefore
, the trimming of trees would lead annihilation of wildlife.
For instance
, it is estimated that most of the
giants
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 species of
animals
 like Pandas and Dinosaurs are already disappeared owing to
the
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deforestation. The remaining habitats are in danger as their sanctuaries are getting diminished.
Thus
, continually logging of plants would make
animals
 homeless
as a result
 these species would be migrated to
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other places. Moving
further
,
the
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human activity like industrialisation and deforestation has negatively impacted
the
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mankind as well. Plants
helps
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 to maintain the environment as they emit
the
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oxygen and absorb
carbandioxide
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carbon dioxide
. The regular intake of fresh oxygen is necessary to live for
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mankind. Apart from that, the erosion of plantations might deter the soil nutrients and
it
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affects the yield of crops. The less production of commodities would affect the financial budget of agronomists. To conclude
then
, it is beyond the discussion that without the existence of plantations, human and wildlife is in danger. I inclined the notion that government and people should make propelling efforts to preserve the forests as the diminish of dense plants would invite some serious problems for the humans and
animals
 as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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