A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?

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A lot of communities believe that expanding of violence in our population is because of the increasing brutality. I partially agree that

might have a response for

this

case, but social network service takes more responsible than

. So I will argue

this

case on both sides of view with my opinions. the solution will be followed later.

First

of all,

companies have already been considered as dangerous of streaming that kind of violent shows toward the world.

For example

, Japanese parents are really sensitive about violent matters, because it might happen to their own son or daughter at their school. So

companies try to avoid a conflict between the public who might have an awareness against

this

matter. I don't think cinema affects the actions of younger generations because we all know all the movies are functions. It is hard to believe that the younger crowd would be affected by those movies.

On the contrary

, SNS in shortening social web service, Youtube has a huge community all over the world. Anyone can access any video content immediately even the violent one. And those videos that stream on youtube are not fiction, they are real content. All pranks or violent movies are easy effects the younger community.

On the contrary

, SNS in shortening social net service, Youtube has a huge community all over the world. Anyone can access any video content immediately even the violent one.

This

is really hard to answer that how we can reduce violence in our nation because all of the videos which have been uploaded on the chain can never be erased. So to decrease the violence rate in our culture is to give the right education to children in school and at home, and continuously observation will lead to a bright future for our association.

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Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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