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The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, teaching adults who cannot read or write is even more important and government should spend more money on this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#education #people #countries #adults #government #money
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It is a
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conspicuous
 fact that educated citizens to the growth and prosperity of a nation.
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 many nations give significant importance in schooling their
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younger
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 illiterate adults are more in need of literacy than the former group and
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 more money should be spent on them. Despite
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a valid
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 viewpoint, I believe that educated children hold a higher value in
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comparison
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 to read and write.
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 it as a useful tool.I believe that governments should
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 so that they can mould a better and
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productive generation
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 for the future. For
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 it is easier to make a
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high school
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 a doctor or an engineer
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compared to
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, who does not know to
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 and write.
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 it will be a better and
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smart
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 choice to
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concentrate
 more on our off-springs. Nowadays, in many countries receiving quality
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tuition
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 places,to study in a better school means higher
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tuition
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 most of them are privately funded institutions.If the governing authorities can provide
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 standards of schooling, it will help create a sense of fairness in the society by, giving a chance to everyone, including the
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financially
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 backward communities. In conclusion,
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even though
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important
 to implement the plans for literacy among the older lot, priority should be given to our growing children as
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 they are a nation's chance for a brighter future.
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