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Some people say that travelling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries, while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about foreign countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals think exploring a
country
 is the best
way
 to gain knowledge regarding its
culture
, whilst some have an opinion that it is not the only
way
, knowledge can be gained by the inter-web and television.
This
 essay will discuss both the points and give reasons why in my opinion travelling is the most enriching
way
 to know about different cultures and countries. The Inter-web has a widespread reach to the information, which usually gives people plenty of options to explore the
culture
.
Firstly
, in the
last
 decade, technology has reached its peak, leading to easier access to Shows and movies from different continents. To exemplify, nowadays in India Korean shows are reaching their peak of popularity while giving a vast idea about Korean
culture
 and
way
 of life.
Secondly
, there are some social media platforms on the internet that allows a person to reach anyone around the globe and gain knowledge about their customs.
For instance
, Omegle is an online video chat app that allows the user to connect with anyone from any
country
 and have a chat. Internet may be popular with the masses but in my opinion, travelling to a particular nation gives you mesmerizing experience. Primarily, Local traditional
culture
 can be seen and felt in person. As a person is physically present in the
country
, he can observe certain things which are not available online.
For example
, August 8th is Singapore day. Carnivals and traditional plays dances happening on the day will give you more information on the
culture
. Secondarily, every
country
 has various traditions. Reaching that
country
 will give you a deep look at its civilization.
For example
, India has around 3000 languages. And more than 300 various types of cultures and traditions. To summarise, Internet has its own perks as availability and affordability, I strongly believe travelling to any nation will pave the
way
 to a better understanding of the
culture
.
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