Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think the modern world makes people more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In
this
modern era, the lifestyle of each individual has been changed drastically. Since sophisticated Technology
plays a pivotal role in the world. Certain people
claim that due to advanced Technology
the communication, which means dependency on each other, has been increased. However
, people
on
the other hand, demonstrate that it happens in vice-versa. Add the comma(s)
,on
This
passage will interpret the notion vividly.
Nowadays, technology
is an essential source of
everyone. Indeed, it has numerous benefits. Change preposition
for
First
and foremost, it is easy for everyone to connect even from thousands of miles, in a spark of seconds. This
would be an added advantage to be in touch. To exemplify, time can be saved, comparing to the conventional method. Secondly
, due to technology
vastly impact globally, the trad and globalization was
possible, due to which an international companies can recruiter a national employee.
Change the verb form
were
Conversely
, as aforementioned people
believe that, the internet has changed the individual. especially, few detrimental effects like, being alone and addition to games, social media to list a few. Which has created ramifications among family and society, and lack of conversation had caused deflection in the bond. Significantly, the brighter side would be, some esteemed social media application has been created a good reputation for people
. For instance
, Replace the word
current
currently
unemployment rate is consistently increasing. Add a comma
,currently
Nevertheless
, these kinds of applications have been a major source for their revenue.
To conclude, Technology
has affected dependent and independent positively and negatively. In my opinion, I believe that in future the technology
will be more advanced, but in present days, than dependent life, independence has a great benefit.Submitted by sudhanlatha328 on
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