Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think the modern world makes people more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
modern era, the lifestyle of each individual has been changed drastically. Since sophisticated
Technology
plays a pivotal role in the world. Certain
people
claim that due to advanced
Technology
the communication, which means dependency on each other, has been increased.
However
,
people
on
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the other hand, demonstrate that it happens in vice-versa.
This
passage will interpret the notion vividly. Nowadays,
technology
is an essential source
of
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everyone. Indeed, it has numerous benefits.
First
and foremost, it is easy for everyone to connect even from thousands of miles, in a spark of seconds.
This
would be an added advantage to be in touch. To exemplify, time can be saved, comparing to the conventional method.
Secondly
, due to
technology
vastly impact globally, the trad and globalization
was
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possible, due to which an international companies can recruiter a national employee.
Conversely
, as aforementioned
people
believe that, the internet has changed the individual. especially, few detrimental effects like, being alone and addition to games, social media to list a few. Which has created ramifications among family and society, and lack of conversation had caused deflection in the bond. Significantly, the brighter side would be, some esteemed social media application has been created a good reputation for
people
.
For instance
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currently
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unemployment rate is consistently increasing.
Nevertheless
, these kinds of applications have been a major source for their revenue. To conclude,
Technology
has affected dependent and independent positively and negatively. In my opinion, I believe that in future the
technology
will be more advanced, but in present days, than dependent life, independence has a great benefit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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