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Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are plenty of casual jobs as well as stable jobs. As well, there are workers looking for a place to set their foot in and stay with
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,
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 or enjoy life at
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 having the
job
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 as an option that can be changed as it suits. In
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, and explain why I believe having a
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 that gives you stability might overcome the
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 of
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casual work. Even though
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 working casually appears to be the best option, there is a chance that, in long term,
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 of
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. Is common for young adults to opt
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 casual work
,
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 because
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 gives them
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freedom
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 to stay or leave whenever they want without worry
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that
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 they are leaving behind. It
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allow
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 them
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 to decide on
career
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 and make mistakes as much as they can.
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, past the
beggining
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beginning
 of professional years, there is not a sustainable option, especially if you have plans of having a family in the future or if you want to have money to do things you enjoy. It can, definitely, be boring to stay at one specific
job
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 your whole career but the financial
serenidipty
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serendipity
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 far worth it. The choice of having
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work that keeps you calm and stable can leave your mind
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worrying
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 to pay for your meal,
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. With
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, the need to provide for your family is bigger than the importance of feeling the
freedom
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 in your life. Having a profession that you have nothing to worry about, allows you more
time
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 to enjoy your hobbies and leisure
time
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 with family and friends. In conclusion, having a
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time
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job
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 allows you to have the
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 it was once the goal, but in a different form. Being able to provide for family and yourself should always be the
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, if you are successful in your career, it can
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 your way more than just that. The real liberty is to be able to do what you want in your free
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job stability
  • financial security
  • permanent employment
  • career growth
  • job flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • diversification of skills
  • autonomy
  • temporary employment
  • independent work conditions
  • 9-to-5 schedule
  • health insurance
  • retirement plans
  • paid vacation
  • job satisfaction
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