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In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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The government yearly budgets normally include the various sector of the
country
, even though, some areas need greater attention than others.
However
, In some parts of the world, leaders place economic
growth
 on top of their budgetary plan.In my opinion, health issues , safety and security as well as education rank higher than economic
growth
.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of valuing economic
growth
 more than others. Prioritizing the financial development of a
country
 more than other areas like health results in to increase in the number of citizens who are dependent and untold hardship in the
country
 .
This
 is because,less attention will be given to the wellness of the individuals in the nation as the hospitals will lack even the basic equipment and supplies;more people will become ill and less productive ,
thus
 , adding more stress to the few able persons .The economic situation will deteriorate
further
 unless something is done to raise the number of productive citizens.
However
, I will not fail to admit that focusing more on economic
growth
 will free
such
 countries from any form of loan as those in authority will harness all the locally available mean in other to improve the
country
 economically.
Conversely
,
this
 can only be achieved when other most vital sectors are considered
first
. In conclusion, even though prioritizing the economic
growth
 has little benefit it might offer, it is nothing to compare to a drastic fall in the number of productive people that the
country
 will witness ,
therefore
, more emphasis should be on the health issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • standard of living
  • infrastructure development
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental impact
  • wealth disparity
  • modernization
  • sustainable development
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • industrialization
  • ecological footprint
  • capital investment
  • urbanization
  • economic prosperity
  • fiscal policy
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