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data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.

#data #consumption #resources #countries #world #population
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The pie chart illustrates some information on the spending and consumption of resources by some countries (USA,
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 and others). In ,addition
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 pie chart shows how the inhabitant is separated. Overall, there are 5 countries like Asia,
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, America, Africa, on the other ,hand there is transport, food, clothing, housing, others on the world spending. With regards to the spending, the
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 of the housing was twice as much from the pointer of the clothing and the pointer of housing was 12%, the same situation, the index of the food outnumbered twice ass much from the per cent of the housing.
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, the high rate
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 was appreciated with two-fifths of (others), in ,contrast the minimum per cent belonged to the clothing with six in every one hundred. In terms of world population and resources, the indexes of USA,
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 were relatively similar with other (60% and 40% respectively). The index of
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 levelled off with the percentage of America in the world population. The pointer of Africa was high twice than the index of the other, in ,
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 the least
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 belonged to the other with five in every one hundred, in ,contrast the maximum
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 was illustrated in Asia population with fifty-seven in every a hundred.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • data
  • spending habits
  • consumption
  • resources
  • population distribution
  • comparison
  • patterns
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • implications
  • disparities
  • environmental consequences
  • social impacts
  • sustainability
  • economic development
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