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A woman’s place is in the home. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The patriarchy and the stereotypical norms which state and dictate that a woman's place belongs at
home
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 and in the kitchen have been going on since the start of the big bang,
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women
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 have fought against these norms and shattered the stereotypes. I strongly disagree with
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 statement and below I am going to explain and illustrate my point of view.
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, the idea of
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 belonging in the kitchen and at
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 has been going on since the stone age, where
women
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 were supposed to stay at
home
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 and nurture their offspring and to cook the meat the food which was gathered by the men. There have been a lot of scenarios throughout history where
women
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 have broken these shackles and rose to power. In
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, modern world there is no
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 field where
women
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 cannot have success from being an auto-driver to going out, to outer space and landing on different planets
women
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 have exceeded in many fields.
Women
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 made sure that they were heard in
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 male-dominated society from older times itself.
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- Let it be Rani Lakshmi Bhai who fought to save her kingdom from the annexed rules of the British army or Marie curie who won the Nobel prize for finding an element. There are common
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 who fought for their basic rights
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 as, for job purposes, for education, for the right to vote,for fighting for one's beloved nation so on and so on. There have been billions of examples and inspirations of
women
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 who stood up for what they believed and for future generations.
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, there are
women
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 who stay at
home
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 and nurture their families, but as I stated it is their personal choice to make. Society cannot dictate as to how
women
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 must live and what they should be doing,
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, being the bread earner of the family or taking care of her family. It is, will and always be her decision to make To sum it up, I reiterate, stating that it is a personal choice of females whether they want to stay at
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 and take care and provide for their family or to go out into the world and pursue their dreams. No man can state whether a woman should belong at
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 or not
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