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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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We live in an era of
information
,where
people
 share different opinions, views through social media,television and so on.
However
, one should focus on how much and what kind of
information
 must be exchanged with the
people
.
This
 essay focuses on the diverse attitude towards
information
 and my cognition of
information
 sharing. According to many
people
, sharing
information
 is good for one's knowledge,since you can gain a tremendous amount of understanding about the topic you are interested in.
For instance
, if the teacher would not share their knowledge with their students,
then
 the
people
 are likely to be less educated because the only way of gaining knowledge would be self-studying.
Moreover
, the scientists should reveal their research to the
people
otherwise
 their own
information
 will be failed to accept by the
people
.
For example
, If the scientists know about certain facts but don't feel necessary to inform the
people
,
subsequently
 they would not have gained a respectful attitude of
people
. Even, the businessman cannot extend their thought and strategies for the growth of their business.
Conversely
, some
people
 don't tend to believe,
information
 is the key to success. As sometimes revealing ideas might not turn out so good. The primary reason for
this
 is,
people
consequently
 exaggerating
information
 unnecessarily.
In addition
, some attempt to make fake news even from the correct
information
 resulting, downfall in business
also
 affecting
people
's lives. Identity theft, hacking can
also
 be the major problem that leads to different crimes. I personally believe revealing crucial news should have a certain extent , about what kind of
information
 should only be provided,where personal business files,important documents should not be exposed.
Therefore
, I support both of these views partially.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • accelerates progress
  • innovative discoveries
  • transparency
  • open access
  • verify results
  • fraudulent
  • ethical practices
  • consumer trust
  • potential risk
  • misuse
  • sensitive information
  • genetic data
  • defense-related technologies
  • proprietary information
  • trade secrets
  • competitive edge
  • value
  • investment of time and resources
  • compensation
  • disincentivize
  • recoup costs
  • balanced approach
  • policies and agreements
  • sensitive data
  • fair compensation
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