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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends.They have just sent you some holiday pictures. Write a letter to your friends.In your letter : • thank them for the holiday and the photos • explain why you didn't write earlier • invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #pictures #photos
Dear Lisa I'm sorry that I didn't reply to your message earlier.I was having some problems after coming back and I couldn't write to you
Firstly
,thank you for those beautiful holiday days.We went to amazing places.
However
, my
favorite
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 place was the park where we had a picnic. The best thing I
like
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it
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was
an
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 atmosphere. I loved the people around us, learned about their culture,and
has
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 some great
conversation
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 with them.On my next
holiday
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 I would like to go there again.
Then
 thank you for the photos,too.They're so fantastic that I'll put them up on my wall
Secondly
,the reason why I didn't reply to you earlier is that I had lost my baggage at the airport. I was so nervous and angry.It has
took
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 three days to find. After
that
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 on the way
to
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home
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 I got stuck in
traffic
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a traffic
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 jam for 3 hours.
Then
 I came home I saw photos that you sent. I
want
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 invite you to my house for the next holidays.We can spend our time in the city.I'm sure it's going to be an exciting and unforgettable holiday Let me know If you're coming next holidays Jasmine
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific details about your experiences and feelings to further enrich your descriptions.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows smoothly into the next one for improved coherence.
task achievement
The letter covers all the required points of thanking for the holiday and photos, explaining the delay in writing, and inviting friends to stay.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for a letter to friends.
coherence cohesion
Includes clear paragraphs with distinct main ideas, aiding in overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Starts with a suitable greeting and ends with a courteous closing, which is good for letter structure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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