As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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car sales are increasing day by day. Many
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wish to buy and ride their individual vehicles. There are some advantages for the human while
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effect on the environment. Still
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good public transport service.
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there can simply buy and use the
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needing list. Because public transport
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unavailable, crowded and take more time for vacation due to
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fact more individuals feel comfortable and
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accessible
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in their
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nobody wants to travel with their baby, kids on a bus for hygiene
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among the community. In doubtless, buying
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essential when we think about
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journey especially family with children.
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the atmosphere.
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our environment
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reduce the
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of personal
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while improving
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and
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public transportation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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