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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible. Others believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, developments in technology allowed people to share
data
 instantly and widely. Some hold the view that sharing
information
 without any charges should be encouraged, while others state that payments are necessary to share
information
.
This
 essay addresses both points of view and the reason why I believe the public should pay for acquiring
information
. On the one hand, some opine that sharing
information
 without any costs should be appreciated because the increase in the volume of
information
 can contribute to the progress in the discussion. By diversifying resources, the public debate can be stimulated, resulting in the advance in academic research and contribution to the common goods.
Nevertheless
, I argue that it should not be promoted to share
information
 freely because it lessens incentives for
data
 providers to conduct their jobs when there are no profits. Gaining new
information
 necessitates large sums of money and effort. The lack of research conductors' financial security makes them harder to execute a good
quality
 of research and diminishes the potential of future academic development.
For example
, conventional
news
 companies have faced difficulty in getting earnings. With the prevalence of social media, the
news
 is able to be published freely and instantly by anyone, and only certain people pay for a good
quality
 of
news
. Some companies transferred their policies by providing
news
 without any charges,
although
 they do not guarantee the
quality
 of
news
 sources.
Thus
, the lack of motivation affects the
data
's
quality
. In conclusion, some people state that sharing
information
 without payments as much as possible is fine since it stirs up the debate;
however
, I believe it deprives incentives of providers, which triggers the aggregation of
data
's
quality
.
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