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There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your mannager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - describe the complaints that have been made - say why the reception area is important - suggest how the reception area could be improved

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Dear Manager, I am writing
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 letter regarding the complaints we received about the reception area. Over the
last
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 few months, concerns about the reception space have been gradually increasing. Many customers are unhappy because they have to stand for a long time to get an appointment, making it difficult for us to deal with them. Our business has seen tremendous growth over the past two months, resulting in a substantial growth in our customers.
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, we failed to expand the welcoming area to accommodate the large number of visitors, making them disappointed with our services.
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 is now impacting our business and can cause unforeseen problems in the long run.
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, it is crucial to resolve
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 issue as quickly as possible. I believe that we should expand the area and put more chairs to ensure that all customers can sit comfortably.
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, it would be great to place a television in the vicinity to keep them engaged. Thank you for your consideration, and I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Raman Kumar
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Task Achievement
In future letters, consider elaborating more on specific solutions and how they can be practically implemented.
Coherence and Cohesion
Connect each paragraph with transition words for smoother flow.
Task Achievement
You maintained a clear and professional tone throughout the letter.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively addresses all the task requirements, providing a complete and coherent response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph contains a single main idea, helping the reader to understand your suggestions easily.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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