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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is reported that 6.6 million
students
 enrolled in
distance
 learning in 2017, while
this
 number has skyrocketed to over 400 million
students
 due to the spread of COVID-19. While some doubt that whether
distance
 learning facilitates offering qualifications, I believe that the positive effects of
this
 development outweigh its adverse impacts . There are two main reasons why people might disapprove of offering qualifications through online learning from a
distance
. The
first
 objection is that parts of
students
 cannot master relevant skills due to the lack of surveillance, which might give rise to invalid certificates
then
 damage the reputation of schools. The
second
 argument against
distance
 learning is that the circumstance of schools is conducive to
students
 who are undisciplined. And homely condition distracts their attentions more easily. In spite of the drawbacks mentioned above, I believe that
distance
 learning is an effective method to deliver knowledge. On one hand, it saves commuting and living costs for
students
.
For example
, international
students
 are not uncommon across the world. If they are accessible to get their diplomas through
this
distance
 learning, they could save considerable school-related fees.
On the other hand
, it is a good opportunity for
students
 who come from poor nations to have the same chance to get qualifications.
This
 means that maybe you can study online courses from Oxford University, whereas you are living in Africa or other places which are far away from England. In conclusion, it seems to me that we gain more than we lose from
distance
 education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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