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The only thing that interferes with my learning is my education” – Einstein. What do you mean by this? And do you think Einstein was correct in saying that?

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Nowadays, there are a lot of different options for future prospects. Some people suggest a stable life when citizens maintain the same live patterns,
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, prefer to avoid
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; whereas, others believe that innovations are always beneficial and can be considered as a positive development.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view;
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, there will be my personal opinion that supports
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 as they lead to improvement.  On the one hand,
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 might bring a lot of beneficial consequences, people sometimes seem to ignore the fact that innovations bring risks as well.
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 appears to be the main reason why some citizens, who achieved something that they wanted to get for many years, prefer to stop and avoid any
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 as they bring risks as well. What is the point of risking if the individual already has everything that they need for living? 
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,
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 are widely considered as the basis of progress. It is almost impossible to reach considerable innovations without any reforms and
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 even though sometimes it appears that the maximal level of development is reached.
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, the industrial revolution has changed the lives of dwellers significantly by replacing coal with other more efficient fossil fuels
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 as petroleum and natural gas.
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, these
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 led to improvement of the quality of living of the past society;
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,
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 can be considered a good development. In the light of the thoughts elaborated upon, I would like to conclude that
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 some people prefer to reach a particular level and maintain that, I believe that individuals ought to do as many
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 as possible in order to develop their lives.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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