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The most important aim of science should be to improve pp's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The primary purpose of
science
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 is often believed to be the improvement of human life.
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this
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 view is reasonable, I partly agree with the statement.
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science
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 should largely aim to benefit society, it should not be confined to
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 single objective. On the one hand, improving people’s lives is undeniably a central function of scientific progress. Advances in medical
research
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 have led to the prevention and treatment of diseases, significantly increasing life expectancy and quality of life.
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, developments in technology have transformed communication, transportation, and access to information, making daily activities more efficient and convenient. In
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 sense, directing scientific
research
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 towards solving real-world problems brings tangible benefits to society and justifies public investment in
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.
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, restricting
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 solely to immediate social improvement may hinder long-term progress. Many scientific breakthroughs originated from curiosity-driven or theoretical
research
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 with no clear practical application at the time.
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, early
research
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 in quantum physics was once considered abstract, yet it later became the foundation of modern electronics and computing. If scientists were required to demonstrate direct social benefits at every stage,
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 discoveries might never have occurred.
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,
science
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 must retain the freedom to explore the unknown, even when outcomes are uncertain. In conclusion,
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 enhancing people’s lives should remain a major priority of scientific endeavour, it should not be regarded as the sole aim. A balanced approach that supports both practical applications and fundamental
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 is essential for sustained scientific and societal advancement.

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task
Make your main view clear in the first paragraph and keep to it.
examples
Add one or two strong facts or simple examples to back ideas.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas, like 'also', 'however', 'in addition'.
structure
Plan with a short intro, two body parts, and a short end.
vocabulary
Use simple, common words. Avoid long or fancy words.
grammar
Keep long sentences short. Check grammar and punctuation.
structure
Clear plan with intro, two body parts, and conclusion.
content
Balanced view that weighs both sides.
content
Good use of examples to show impact.
readability
Easy to read and follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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