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Research says more and more business training and business meetings taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is commonly believed that
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 number of commercial activities are conducted online. In my opinion, the demerits fall pale in
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comparison
 to the merits.
Firstly
, online meetings
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 commuting time and
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 flexibility. Undoubtedly, in
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 modern era technology has revolutionised and advanced form of
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communication
 has evolved and business
communitues
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communities
community
 now find it
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easy
 to meet online as it saves their precious time and money.
For instance
, organisations can discuss important issues
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 and any time just by giving a prior
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notice
 for an upcoming meeting.
Hence
, people in any corner of the world can access seminars
Secondly
, online
trainings
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training
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 are cheap. undeniably, companies nowadays no longer require to hire training premises and as result
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companies
 are able to save
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over run
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 cost.
In addition
, the staff and
wokers
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workers
 can take good care of their domestic works just by working from home.
On the other hand
, organising e training can invite intruders to hack
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crucial business information and business organisations may face severe consequences of data theft. There is a threat to
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privacy and can lead to insider trading in companies. In conclusion, merits dominate over
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the demerits
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 of online training.
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