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Lately, more and more work are done by machines instead of human. Do you think the positive impact on the development outweigh the negative impact on individuals and society?

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It is commonly believed that nowadays
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 number of tasks are carried out by robots rather than
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manual
 operation. In my opinion, merits would fall pale in comparison to the demerits.
To begin
 with,
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machinery
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do not offer innovative ideas. undeniably, new ideas and thoughts are needed in order to face
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 environment and
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equipment
 fail to provide
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 assistance. It is the human efforts and
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intellectual
 ability that can
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 any kind of crisis and
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challenges
challenge
.
for instance
, market trends are
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constantly
 changing and it becomes
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flexible situations. Another point to consider is that
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robotics
 prompt unemployment in the economies. it is imperative to
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 more and more machines are used human efforts find no place to
work
 and eventually it can put people out of
work
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permanently
however
 the machines can not put an end to
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.
on the other hand
, automation
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higher
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 capacity to do massive
work
. undoubtedly,
equipments
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equipment
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 have the ability to
work
 untiring and can provide
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 results within a short span of time
although
 technological gadgets require periodic
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maintenance
 in order to function smoothly. To
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illustrate
, laser printers can print
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 one thousand prints in 10 minutes if they are well maintained.
Hence
, machines have a higher rate of productivity. In conclusion, demerits like lack of ideas dominate over the merits of machine uses.
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