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Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, hoever, think that others types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, authorities consider more about economic
progress
 as
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 significant purpose while
,
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 so many
people
 think that other kind of
progress
 can be mention equally in the nations. I
am totally agree
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 with governments that economic
progress
 must be
as
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a priority goal for
the
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societies,
however
, I
throughly
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thoroughly
through
 agree with the idea of
people
 who believe in
other kind
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another kind
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 of
progress
.
This
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a discussion
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in
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 both views. Begin with
first
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 reason, I can see that if economic
progress
 improves in the country more
people
 can live cosy and
convinient
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convenient
 as well as not much stress in the life.
For example
, economic can make the process of finding
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 easier and can increase the
employment's
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 salaries.
Also
, welfare is increased in the community. In short,
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economic
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economy
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 can improve
high
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 level of life. Move on to the
second
 reason, I
throughly
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thoroughly
through
 agree with
people
 who believe that government should care about
other type
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another type
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 of
progress
 like education, agriculture and medical health.
For instance
, education is the most important part of all the communities that not only increase the level of
litracy
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literacy
 but
also
rise
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 the level of knowledge. By spending money
in
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 farming and cultivating in
the
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agriculture, we can
acheive
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achieve
 better products.
Then
, we can have exports all those products. Even
by
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using
high
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 quality
of
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vegtables
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vegetables
 can reduce the load of non-communicable
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.
Moreover
, medical health is
important
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aid
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 for
people
 in
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society.
Healthy
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 society can help
government
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the government
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 to be more
succeed
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 in economic
progress
.
Threfore
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Therefore
, all
above
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 reasons are important for the nations. To sum up, the authorities should notice to both
economice
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economic
 and other
progress
 equally in the communities. As we mentioned above, other
kind
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kinds
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 of
progress
such
 as education, agriculture, medical health and welfare are
important
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an important
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 development for all countries.
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