When asked to choose between a life without work and working most of the time, people would always choose not to work. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion.

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Throughout history,
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most of their time working as it is the only legitimate option for survival. Many,
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, think that if a person had a choice of working or not, he would opt for the second option. In
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essay, I will explain why I feel that it is a wrong assumption and prove my point of view with examples. A notion about boring and routine work prevails among the majority of the population.
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, considering that most of the
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’s time is dedicated to working, for many it is a matter of life to have a suitable job,
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why they are looking for a job until it would appeal to them and bring them joy and fulfilment. Mostly creative
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, like bloggers on YouTube, are constantly searching for new content and new subscribers because they are motivated and inspired by their profession.
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, there is no reason why they abandon working life. Despite that, many
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may vote in favour of working because of the community that surrounds them. The job allows us to find
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who have similar interests that, in turn, make the bond between
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stronger. Programmers in IT companies,
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,
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working at the same place,
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gather
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participation
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in various competitions even in their spare time.
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has a profound influence on lives, perhaps without work, you may hardly find
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people
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. In conclusion,
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people
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while
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thinking about work feel upset and stress, for many others it is a great way to improve life and meet new
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • personal interests
  • social isolation
  • structured daily routine
  • sense of purpose
  • achievement
  • boredom
  • overworking
  • burnout
  • hobbies
  • family time
  • work pressures
  • stress
  • health issues
  • social interactions
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