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Now-a-days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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Many individuals nowadays prefer to
work
 for themselves rather than being employed in an organization. The main reason behind
this
 preference is the freedom which
people
 get by working independently.
However
, I believe
this
 phenomenon has both merits and demerits and one has to
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 careful before taking
such
 a decision.
To begin
 with self-employment merits, entrepreneurship is greatly encouraged with lots of business seminars and workshops advertised. Generally, any information on setting up a company is easily accessible for those who are willing, as being a business person, the image itself has a feeling of luxury, respectability, and success. An entrepreneur gets
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multiple sources of income
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 if he chooses to invest in different projects and can easily become wealthier
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Steve Jobs. Another benefit of being self-employed, you can be your own boss and can
work
 remotely with
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flexible hours.
However
, there are several drawbacks to
this
. To start with, there is no guarantee that a self-employed person will earn enough to live a comfortable life. When
people
work
 for a company, they have the assurance of a guaranteed paycheck at the end of the month;
however
, when they
work
 for themselves
this
 guarantee is missing. Another disadvantage is that many self-employed
people
work
 day and night and do not get time to spend with their family and friends.
Thus
, it creates an imbalance in their
work
 and personal life.
Moreover
, a huge difference can be seen in their daily routine which affects their health adversely. To recapitulate, working for oneself is definitely beneficial for young
people
 because it enables them to
work
 on their own terms;
however
, there are drawbacks
such
 as the lack of a guaranteed paycheck that need to be considered before choosing to be an entrepreneur.
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