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Some people think that success is the best indicator for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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There is a stereotype among
people
 about the key to
success
. Some
people
 believe
success
 is the only indicator
for
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intelligence
.
On the other hand
, others consider there are other ways to define brilliance. In my take on
this
, I believe that
success
 is able to be used as a criterion to gauge an individual’s savvy.
First
 of all, I believe all successful
people
 are intelligent, but not only that. The meaning of
intelligence
 that I intend is not necessarily good at academic value,
however
, brilliant in other ways.
For instance
,
intelligence
 to look for opportunities and they are aware of their strengths and weaknesses.
Nevertheless
, having brilliant skills is not enough. We must be hard-working, investing time to develop skills and money as early as possible.
This
 is because we can see that a lot of
people
 with high degrees find it difficult to get a job without skills and work well nowadays.
Secondly
, there are several measurements of
intelligence
 developed by scientists at the moment – including emotional, spiritual, and intellectual
intelligence
. Those measurements can be used for
people
 to achieve their goals,
such
 as
people
 having high scores in intellectual
intelligence
 but having the lowest scores in emotional
intelligence
 might not be successful. Because successful
people
 need the ability to cope with many challenges and adapt in the worst situation in order to achieve
success
, those criteria include emotional
intelligence
. In conclusion, in order to succeed, we are not only having
intelligence
 in academic fields, but we need emotional and spiritual
intelligence
 that might become a factor in how
people
 can be successful.
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