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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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in the course of time and changing items of life,
people
 prefer to spend their holiday in their own country until they travel abroad, so domestic trips have become more popular than foreign ones.I agree with the opinion, and in
this
 essay, I will support my view with examples.
First
 of all, the main issue is
money
 which is an essential factor for travel. A foreign trip costs more than a domestic tour, so you have to spend more
money
 on an abroad trip
although
 you can spend half that
money
 in your county on holiday.
For example
, we can not journey abroad because we have to pay at least three or four times the cost of a domestic journey.
Next
 point, In some countries there are many
tourist
 attractions. When your habitat has many areas for a holiday, you no longer need to trip foreign and you prefer to spend the vacation in your country. Instance, in turkey, has many
tourist
 cities
such
 as Antalya and Izmir which Antalya and Alaniya are coastal cities, and Izmir is one of the most beautiful cities in turkey.
On the other hand
, most
people
 have enough
money
 but there are few
tourist
 attractions on their estate, so they prefer to go abroad. Like that Iran, that person goes to foreign because they do nat many places to spend their vacation or they do not take care of these places properly
then
 they choose to journey abroad. In conclusion, to reduce the low cost of trips and have many
tourist
 places to spend holidays, the reason is that
people
prefers
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prefer
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 to travel more and more in the future in their country, but some
people
 have enough
money
; unfortunately, they do not have resorts to spend their vacation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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