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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The issue of whether the government should spend funds on railroads or highways is a moot point for society nowadays, some
people
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roadways are more advantageous than
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railways
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. According to my belief,
railways
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 are a better
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 of transportation than any other way.
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, allocating public funds in establishing and improving
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 will decrease the mortality rate as
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 mode of commuting is environmentally friendly and it releases less carbon dioxide which will reduce diseases like cancer, migraine, respiratory illness etc.
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, the citizens of the nation will enjoy a healthy lifestyle.
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, findings of
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research conducted by Delhi university shows that constructing metro trains have reduced
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pollution by 28% and which indirectly has improved the health of
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.
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, The development of
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 have a direct impact on the economic development of the nation, it will increase the employment opportunities for the
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. By making sure that the facility of the railway is available to everyone the officials should try to build rail tracks in each and every corner of the country.
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, a study in China has revealed that after improving railroads rate of unemployment decreased in developing countries as the majority of
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 got employed in
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 sector which leads to improvement in their way of living. To summarize, the government has to take initiative to develop
railways
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 though it is burdensome in the matter of finance
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it will have a positive impact on the country as it will increase the economic growth and as well as improve the standard of living of
people
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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