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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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It is noticed that the cost of fuels significantly grew
up
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in the
last
 10-20 years period, despite
this
 fact, some
people
 dispute that demand for
fuel
 and
fuel
 resources around the
world
 will drop if
fuel
's cost experiences more rising in prices in the future. I am in
favor
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 of the idea that increasing
fuel
 prices will lead to a decrease in
fuel
 consumption since alternative energy will become popular and
people
 will be more eco-friendly.
To begin
 with, if the cost of
fuel
 increases, for the majority it will be inconvenient and useless because the price of different petrol contributes to inflation in all fields of life. So,
people
's outcome may outweigh their income
due to
 inflation and they will investigate other ways to save money, in
this
 case, another way is using alternative energies. Leveraging air generators, and sun panels are considered the best alternative way of using them.
For instance
, nowadays it has become popular to use hydro cars or vehicles, that use sun energy
such
 as Tesla all over the
world
.
Additionally
, decreasing demand for
fuel
 makes the
world
 better and eco-friendlier. Since, as we know different gases, and kinds of petrol hurt the environment, so if
people
 reject and stop the use of fuels, the
world
 will not be contaminated and the ecological state will become much better. Take one example, sun, hydro, and wind energies are clear, eco, and cheaper than oil. These days it is vital to be environmentally friendly, since every second we destroy the
world
 with our actions. To take everything into account, I can say that
world
 consumption of
fuel
 will experience a fall, if there are increases in the prices of
fuel
. It may positively affect
people
 and the
worlds's
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 ecological condition.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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