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Some people believe that only governments should deal with medical care. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is considered by many that medical service should be an area that only the
government
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 interest in. I think private and public
hospitals
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 must go together in modern world’s countries ,unlike communist ones.
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, the public hospital offers many opportunities that
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 do not cost any charges.
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, the public can make use of their facilities whatever conditions.
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, some surgery related to the brain or heart that would be expensive in a private hospital can undergo free in
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hospitals
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.
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 led to all parts of society can reach medical care and so improving public health.
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, it provides equality between
people
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 coming from different social backgrounds,
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 if only the
government
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 interest in medical services, all of them can exploit it whether
people
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 are underprivileged or wealthy.
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, it is hard for the
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 to allocate a substantial amount of money to the medical area and some technology being in their hospital are generally of favour so the usage of them for some situations is not appropriate. If it is allowed that private
hospitals
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 are built up, they get to have the cutting-edge apparatuses used in different areas, resulting in treating drastic situations and so requiring
people
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 to go abroad for the cure.
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, some private
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 can supply developed machines involved in effective lasers for using to cure malignant cancer.
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 to
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, these require additional capacity for health services. So In conclusion,
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 public hospital seems to take advantage of free of charge, in some conditions
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 need to alternative service of private
hospitals
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. I believe that both of them serve the public.
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