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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that one of the most effective
way
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 to tackle global environmental problems is to
rise
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raise
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the
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fuel
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 prices. While I agree that
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 measure may help humans to improve global environmental
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, I believe that there are other methods that can be adopted to address
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 situation. There are many reasons why increasing the cost of
fuel
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 can contribute to dealing with environmental
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 over the world.
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,
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 will lessen the amount of transportation per year and encourage local people to use buses
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 of private vehicles
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 as cars or motorbikes, so the emissions of carbon dioxide will be reduced.
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 helps to improve the quality of air and fights climate change in the
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 years.
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, the raising of
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cost
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 may lessen the traffic congestion, especially at peak times, which control the flow of transportation.
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, there are other measures
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 be adopted to alleviate environmental
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. The most important thing is that national authorities should enact legislation
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ban
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 heavily those who pollute the environment.
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, environmental
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 should be high on the government agendas. Another measure is that non-government organizations should be established to raise the public’s awareness about environmental
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, they should spread
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 about environmental
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 through social networking sites
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 as Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter. As news can be shared rapidly on a large scale. In conclusion,
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 raising the cost of
fuel
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, the public and governments should take other measures to mitigate the environmental
issues
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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