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we live in a world of technology these days. While the Internet brings it with clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary
world
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, technology is in the spotlight and could allow the
Internet
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 to bring undeniably numerous benefits to
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nonetheless
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 some issues regarding the control and safeness of
information
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 outweigh the positive development. In my opinion, I totally disagree, and
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 with, the
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 is a milestone in the
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 the main reason why I believe
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 because it has changed completely the way
people
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 live today. The virtual
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 brought about a faster pace into everyone’s life when some matters became simpler than they used to be,
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 as how
people
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 communicate, search for a job and even how they acquire knowledge. From my perspective, the lack of security that some websites may have, or even the absence of the source of the
information
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 do not minimise
people
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’s usage. Another reason why positiveness outweighs the disadvantages is that the free content available online has enormously increased. Several
people
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 share their knowledge through online platforms which make
information
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 runs faster amongst
people
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. Once they become more frequent and common, cybersecurity needed to grow at the same level to assure that the environment is safe, and the
information
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 shared is accurate.
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, with the advent of
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 rapid growth, the way a country regulates its permits and prohibitions needed to evolve and indeed it does not mean that all problems diminish the importance of all advantages presented. In conclusion, it is clear that problems regarding cybersecurity exist, because they have evolved alongside the
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, it does not make them more evident than all pros the
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 brought to the
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 as the rapid knowledge shared and the faster way of life.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connectivity
  • digital banking
  • cybersecurity
  • data protection
  • security breaches
  • cyber attacks
  • online transactions
  • digital divide
  • surveillance
  • freedom of information
  • responsible usage
  • ethical considerations
  • digital footprints
  • online behavior
  • information inequality
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