Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, concentration issues are increasing in students. There are various reasons behind that
such
as hard curriculum, harsh schedule, mischievous
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cause
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in detail and some
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. There is no doubt that young kids paying less attention at school. The main cause is strict curriculum,
for instance
,
school
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have more practical subjects than art and paintings. Today, most of
institutions
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just focus on
technological
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, scientific, and mathematical program, which make the
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, there
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no space or
time
for artwork and game period.
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, today children have the all-day tight
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table like seven to eight hours at school, after
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they have fully packed homework which they have to finish in the evening,
therefore
they don’t get
time
play at home.
This
makes them start avoiding study and do other
activities
such
as play games, watch movies or TV. They prefer more fun and hilarious moments because it is their childhood. There are some effective solutions to resolve
this
issue. Schools should add some other creative
activities
in
curriculum
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, some games and outdoor
activities
which make them more active, so they can give more
time
to study. Along with, teachers should divide the homework of subjects into weekdays,
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Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday half subjects, Thursday, Friday and Saturday half subject; by
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they can get Sunday free for fun and relax.
However
, parents should provide more emotional support to their young ones and help them
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their homework, projects and assignments. In conclusion,
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is necessary to have knowledge about
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but
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other
activities
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more relax after these leisure
activities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distractions
  • focus
  • pay attention
  • lack of interest
  • motivation
  • fatigue
  • sleep
  • classroom environment
  • teaching methods
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • workload
  • support
  • active learning strategies
  • engaging
  • student-centered teaching
  • realistic goals
  • rewards
  • balanced lifestyle
  • screen time
  • breaks
  • physical activity
  • support and guidance
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