IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Lina, I'
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 just writing to let you know that I'
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 moving to Singapore in December to start my
master
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's. It's a three-year program at Singapore Management University, and I will be studying for a
Master
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 of Science in Financial Economics. Studying for a
master
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's is very challenging, but it is important to me because my corporate advisor told me that if I want to increase my salary, I need to get a
master
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's degree. Speaking of jobs, I'
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 going to need to find a part-time job to help pay for my living costs and rent
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 I'
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 studying. Would you be able to email me a list of newspapers that advertise jobs in your area? Or can you ask your uncle, since you said he manages a supermarket, if he can help me find work there? I believe that a job at
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 would be perfect for me. All the best, Lolo

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one idea.
coherence and cohesion
Add a friendly question or remark at the end of the letter to make it more engaging.
task achievement
You clearly state your study plans and why you need a job.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly tone, which is great for personal communication.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational aspirations
  • Work experience
  • Financial independence
  • Resume (or CV)
  • Local job market
  • International student
  • Legal requirements
  • Student work permit
  • Employment trends
  • Time management
  • Networking
  • A part-time position
  • Balance studies and work
  • Job hunting strategies
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