Task 2: Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same way as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Juvenile delinquency is an issue of broad interest to the general public. Some people advocate that the government should impose the same punishments on young offenders as adult lawbreakers. Personally, I think that juvenile criminals should suffer the consequences differently compared with mature ones. Granted, it is unjustifiable for the young who are in breach of the law to be treated in the same way as adult offenders owing to their insufficient intellect. Young perpetrators cannot fully make out the adverse consequences of their

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. Some take part in illegal acts just because of curiosity, copying adults’

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, or committing a petty crime to escape poverty.

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, giving them a harsh sentence is deemed not a fair trial.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

118 words

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Task 2: Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same way as adults who commit crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to some people, it would be better if industries are established in regions outside the urban area. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages.