In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

There is an
increasingly
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number of local
stores
closing due to the fact that shoppers are choosing to buy in bigger places, even though they need to travel a larger distance for that.
However
, for the closing
stores
that is
a drawback, from the customer point of view
this
is unavoidable. With a growing community,
it
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also
comes different shopping options, which in long term is more beneficial. Buying from small local
stores
is becoming less common,
however
, there is still the need to go to local
stores
, to buy immediate essentials, a medicine that
it
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is unpredictable to be needed or a food missed from a recipe that will be made before the
next
big shopping. There is
also
a concern that
,
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with those
closures
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the economy will
also
be affected
with
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lower business numbers and decimated
money
rotation.
Nevertheless
, the small buys made
on
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local shops are not enough to sustain them there. People are inclined to go shopping once a month and buy their needs in a mall
instead
of going to the
neighborhood
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shop more often
,
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and spend
money
and time there. Despite the considerably less
money
spent whilst shopping in one store at a big centre, the temptation to spend
money
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, non-essential items, are more likely to happen.
For instance
, going to a supermarket inside a mall
,
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gives you plenty of visual incentives to
browse
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for clothes, house items and other appliances that
was
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not on the original shopping list. Researches
has
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shown that the replacement in kitchen appliances has increased 20% in houses where people choose to buy in shopping centres. In conclusion, the fact that
,
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people are opting to go shop in large centres has more advantages than trying to maintain small
stores
functioning. The alternative for
those small business
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to survive from closing is
migrate
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to
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of providing services,
such
as, online business or selling their items to those large companies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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