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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old – fashioned values such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is generally considered that, In the modern era, The true value of someone is observed by the money and status that they hold and the inner abilities like honesty and truthfulness are not counted now as compared to older times. I largely disagree with the notion because Internal abilities are crucial for self-satisfaction and it makes relationships stronger.
To begin
 with, Moral
values
 are important because they are priceless and nobody can purchase them.
Moreover
, they make
people
 more confident in social
life
.
In other words
, if someone is never dishonest and treats everyone with kindness and
respect
, they would have that status in society which money would never get. It makes
people
 mentally strong and more self-confident because they do not make wrong decisions.
For instance
, One of my uncles is very respectful in our family because he never did mischief with anyone and everyone always looks after him.
Hence
, Old fashioned
values
 are still vital for everyone. Another major fact is, They build a strong bond of internal and external relationships. To explain it, internal quality like honesty makes
people
 trust us, whether it is on work or family and
this
 brings
respect
 from the community.
For example
, In New Zealand, a person forgot his wallet in a taxi which contains 2000 dollars cash.
instead
 of keeping it, the taxi driver returned his money and his act was praised all over the news with huge
respect
 in the country.
Therefore
, having good moral
values
 still makes a huge impact on a person's
life
.
In contrast
, Some young generation crowd are after those who live a luxurious
life
 in the city. These kinds of
people
 have no
life
 standards and keep changing from one person to another. In conclusion, having luxurious
life
 is good for someone but it doesn't make any big status.
On the other hand
,
people
 with good manners and
values
 are still given
respect
 in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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