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The development of tourism contributed to english becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to english becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world.

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It is thought by some that globalisation would cause
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, leading to only
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 spoken in the
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. There are a few benefits as well as drawbacks to
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 development.
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 evident advantage of having only
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 is that it improves the quality of education. The
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 of the major causes of miscommunication between
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 from different
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backgrounds
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, if
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 spoke the same
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, they could avoid conflict stemming from differences in
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, is characterised by the use of ambiguous phrases, which often confuses
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speaking
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 is that it removes the need to learn another
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 is highly beneficial to individuals relocating to another country as it enables them to save time, money and effort to acquire a
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, students studying abroad would be able to focus on developing
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 expertise in their chosen field.
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, brings some
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disadvantages
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,
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 of which is the loss of culture. Undoubtedly,
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 and culture are closely connected, which inevitably means that the disappearance of
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 culture in which it is used. For
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 global
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 presents a risk of hindering development in society as diversity plays a crucial role in solving complex social and environmental issues. A good example of
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 is the well-known space agency NASA, which started hiring recruits from diverse linguistic backgrounds in order to achieve greater goals.
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, the loss of
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 would result in a decline in tourism. Learning another
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 and interacting with the local residents brings joy to many individuals across the globe. The disappearance of
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, deprives
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 of the motivation to travel abroad. A large portion of foreigners
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 Japan to become able to read manga in the original
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. In conclusion,
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 benefits
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 in terms of communication and convenience
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 contributes to the loss of cultural diversity. It is crucial that the
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 strive to ensure
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 development of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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