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Nowadays, people are spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their work place. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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In some
instances
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people
 tend to spend most of their time working. One
reason
 is it requires them to finish loads of
work
 and because of
this
 they cannot meet it within working hours.
On the other
hand
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 I agree with
this
 statement. As
what
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I mentioned above because of workloads and pending works they need to finish
people
 opt to do overtime at
work
. One example of it
people
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 who
work
 in School.
People
 in
this
 industry sometimes requires to stay longer just to finish the grades of their students or
work
 their lesson plans for the
next
 day. Another
reason
 is personal preference and they don't want to bring
work
 at home. Why? they believe that they can concentrate and do their job accurately when they finish it at
work
.
Lastly
 to get
an
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extra pay for exceeded hours of
work
. In conclusion,
People
 has their own reasons why they want to spend more time at
work
. It can be a personal or financial
reason
. Any
reason
 they have I think we
sohould
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should
 respect it.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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