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The government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree?

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Although
 many
people
 believe that government should more payout on train line rather than roadways. As per my point of view that railway is required more budget than roadways. My inclination is justified in the ensuing paragraphs. There are various transportation ways used by
people
 for commuting from one place to another. It is true that
people
 always choose
rail
 line for travelling far place. There is the strongest point for expending much on the metro that train carries thousand of a passenger with it from one location to
other
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 at one time.
Therefore
 it reduces waste of fuel
also
.
Besides
this
 is
also
 true that
,
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 tonnes of good is easily imported -exported by railway.
This
 is not possible for roadways because it is time-consuming and hard to convey heavy goods. By ,
this
 it is cleared that government should discuss much on the railway. In fast pace life, commuters always try to reach the desired place safely and faster.
Furthermore
,it is reported that most of the
rail
 line is located at outside the busy city so there is no traffic issue for travelling. It is more reliable, cheaper and safer transport way than another transport way. It is proven that most of the accidents occurred on road due to traffic and
stree
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street
 of long driving which is increase day by day. There are many countries that have interconnected
rail
 systems like, metro, monorail, subway and all because
of
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it is more frequent and reliable for all. Conclude, any government of a country should expend much behind
rail
 than other for fascinating to
people
.
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