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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
There is argue staying in
foreign
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country
 would be caused crucial social and practical issues
to
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local
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a local
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citizen
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citizens
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.
Although
 those are possible to happen,
however
, in
this
 paper I will partially disagree foreign
people
 would cause that way.
Firstly
, foreigners will cause social and practical problems in the
country
, if they did not want to learn its local
language
 well and mingle with
local
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the local
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citizen
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citizens
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. It will be causing,
for instance
, make a misunderstood, an offensive and become an anti-social.
This
 is because
language
 is basic knowledge and communication is
essential
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 kit to survive in
different
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a different
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country
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countries
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. From
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the language
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language
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 we can learn their culture and characteristic of majority
people
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 there.
As a result
, there is no problem as long as foreigners
able
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are able
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 to blend with
community
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the community
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.
Secondly
, living in
foreign
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country
 and capable to speak well precisely to make good opportunities rather than its problems. Opportunities that we can have been able to improve social interaction from there,
such
 as, make a new friend, build a good connection, and build empathy for other
people
.
Moreover
, foreigners which became part of the society will be able to speak
foreign
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language
 well gradually. In order to fulfil their basic need, they have to interact with other
people
 every day and from
gradually
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interaction
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,interaction
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 it will be decreasing cause
serious
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a serious
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 social
problem
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problems
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 like misunderstood. By way of conclusion, I believe living in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
 can improve social interaction.
However
, it depends on the
people
, they want to learn well and
easy
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interact
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 with others or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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