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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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If someone asks the question, “Without having what humans cannot survive?”, without any hesitation one can reply
it
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 as
food
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. If a Noble prize is to be given to a profession, which contributes to the
people
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’s welfare,
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 Farming will be on the top of that list.
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 there are significant developments in
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Agriculture, still a portion of
people
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 around the globe go hungry. Recent advances in
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agriculture include the
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 of
tractor
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tractors
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 in place of an animal to dig the land,
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use
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the use
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 of pipelines to spray chemicals, etc. Some
people
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 may think that farming has become easier. But what we know is only the one side of the story,
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, there are many problems.
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, various chemicals have been introduced
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 the market, but proper guidelines are not given, which might result in over-usage of them.
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, resulting in the damage of the crop and making
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 hungry for not getting
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.
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 in the world population might be another reason for the shortage of
food
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. We are living in a world of increasing populations, even the advancements cannot satisfy everyone’s hunger. Government must consider implementing acts to preserve the
food
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. If we look at the statistics provided by the various organizations,
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 of
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that is
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 consumed is less, compared to the wastage of
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. Certain measures need to be taken to
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 the available
food
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 wisely.
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, conducting campaigns
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world-wide
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 to bring awareness about how much
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 is being wasted among the
people
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.
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, strict punishments are to be imposed for the individuals, who waste
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. Necessary guidelines should be given to the farmers in order to
use
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 the improvements in an efficient way and prevent any damage to the crops.
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, to conclude, yes, it is true that there are major advances in the agriculture sector, but still many
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 are dying because of hunger.
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However
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 it is not a problem that does not have any solution. Proper measures can be taken to overcome
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 problem and there might be one day, where there will be no death because of hunger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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