Should students be allowed to choose which classes they take, or should they be required to take the same classes as everyone else? What are the advantages and disadvantages of each approach to education? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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has drawbacks and positive outcomes. I will explain
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students
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the chosen field. Why?
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a good singer.
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their negative outcome of it. One example of it
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and
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want to adopt changes.
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who are used to one area are afraid to do new things. They are afraid
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my own experience it is better if we will allow
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to choose their degree. I strongly believe that if you like what you're doing you are happy about it. but as a student
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you should open to the possibilities of changes in life.
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