With the increased of global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.
It’s argued that we should have
access
to unused land to exploit resources because we are short on supplies. However
, discovering more areas to make use of it for oil and gas
could lead to negative
impact on the environment. Some people will take advantage of it for beneficial purposes and not recovered the damage they have done. If we don’t let them Add an article
a negative
the negative
access
to
more Change preposition
apply
of
oil and Change preposition
apply
gas
, it would encourage other industries to change source
of Correct pronoun usage
their source
energy
.
There are situation
that companies, for Fix the agreement mistake
situations
there
own benefit, constantly destroying thousands and Correct your spelling
their
millions
hectares of land. Since it’s expensive for companies to recovered Add the preposition
ofmillions
those area
, most of them will find a way to avoid the fees. Change the determiner
that area
those areas
This
continue
to happen as people keep wipe off Change the verb form
continues
forest
and not restore will end up Add an article
the forest
over consumption
of natural Correct your spelling
overconsumption
resource
. For example
, in
Brazil where most parts of the Amazon rainforest are, is rapidly reported Change preposition
apply
Change preposition
to being
being legally exploit
. It Change the verb form
being legally exploited
cause
indiscriminate exploitation of Change the verb form
causes
resource
and the price of each hectare of the forest to driven down to just 160 dollars in 2020.
Instead
of using unrewable
Correct your spelling
renewable
unreliable
energy
such
as oil and gas
, we could use other power sources that won’t dwindled
in the future. If we used renewable Change the verb form
dwindle
energy
, we won’t be short on supplies and concerned about dealing with it. Even when we have more access
to more areas, the natural resource
will be dwindled
shortly, so it would Change to the active voice
dwindle
have dwindled
better
to have an unlimited source of Add a missing verb
be better
energy
. Solar energy
is an example, the sun generates into
electricity for factories to work. Because the Change preposition
apply
gas
and fuel not
Add a missing verb
are not
being produce
Change the verb form
producing
everyday
, the people that live near that area won’t have to suffer from the chemicals Replace the word
every day
polluted
the air.
In conclusion, the world is short on Correct pronoun usage
that polluted
resource
for industrial purposes and demand on continue to exploit more. However
, we shoudn’t
have Correct your spelling
shouldn't
wouldn't
access
to undiscovered areas since it will effect
negatively on the Correct your spelling
affect
evironment
. Correct your spelling
environment
On the other hand
, we could use other source
of Change the wording
another source
other sources
energy
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite