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Society is based on rules and laws.it could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era,
society
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 is imposed many
rules
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 and
laws
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, which assets to living
people
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 and deter criminals,
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 if one can break these
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 and what they want to do
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 can not work properly.
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, I completely agree with
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 statement and examine the benefits of
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 and regulations.
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 and foremost, the community should be developed a privacy sector by arranging surveillance cameras on or in every corner of
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.
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, if someone comes late at night and steal their goods by theft, one could catch theft with help of cameras.
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, strict
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 would apply to a foreigner or unknown
vistors
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visitors
 in
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 between the afternoon period at 1 pm to 4 pm.
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, some salesmen are frauds and wasting of
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 precious time by explaining the value of their products.
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,
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 has their identity card or gate pass for entering
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 campus.
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,
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 are created by
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's
people
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 and they should follow
everyone
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 in a good manner. The
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 law is to use limited water and electricity,
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 is provided by the government. if someone uses a huge amount of water, a shortage of water could happen in the entire
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. The
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 law is
everyone
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 can maintain their stairs and parking plots by doing cleanliness. On the other side, for those who are violated
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 and
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, management should impose fines on them. If nobody is implementing the
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 and
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, though
society
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 would not work smoothly on it.
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,
everyone
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 should take some responsibility for
society
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's
rules
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 and
laws
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that every
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 should have
rules
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 and regulations because which could increase
people
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 safety and rectify the personal problem as well.

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