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Due to rise in university fees arts subjects like history and philosophy should not be taught anymore. Only degree courses should be taught for better employment opportunities. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, some argue that
arts
 majors
such
 as history and philosophy should no longer be taught in
universities
due to
 rising tuition costs.
However
, I disagree with
this
 notion because it would reduce academic diversity and limit learning to career-focused courses only. The primary reason against removing
arts
subjects
 is that it would discourage individuals from pursuing their
interest
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 in creative and intellectual fields. Engaging in
subjects
 like history and philosophy can enhance critical thinking and foster innovation, which
are
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is
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 essential in today’s world.
Additionally
, students studying these
subjects
 still have employment opportunities,
such
 as becoming professional researchers or historians.
For instance
, there are numerous historical sites and areas still requiring research, offering potential for academic exploration and career growth.
Moreover
, focusing solely on degrees tied to job markets may not be beneficial in the long run. Industries evolve rapidly, and degrees that are relevant today may not be as valuable in the future.
In contrast
,
subjects
 like history and philosophy provide timeless knowledge and skills,
such
 as problem-solving and analytical thinking, which remain valuable in any era. To address the rising tuition fees,
universities
 could offer financial support for
arts
 students or increase fees for high-demand courses that lead to immediate job opportunities. In conclusion, eliminating
arts
subjects
 from
universities
due to
 rising fees would be short-sighted. These fields contribute to intellectual growth and offer stable prospects in a changing world.
Therefore
,
universities
 should continue to support
arts
 education
while
 finding ways to address financial concerns.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • cultural preservation
  • historical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • communication skills
  • analytical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • cultural awareness
  • university curricula
  • personal and intellectual growth
  • employment outcomes
  • diverse range of disciplines
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