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Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefit than studying in one’s home country? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#benefit #one’s #home #country
despite the fact that some people
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believe
 that going to study outside your country is harmful,others strongly think that more advantages
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some one
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 decide
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 abroad. I agreed that being in another country to continue your degree is
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trmendous
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tremendous
 positives.
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, the main advantage
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 studying abroad is that learning the new-domestic culture. Having
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 pattern of life
such
 as
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 and shopping
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is
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interesting
 and making your life more valued.
for example
,people who
aple
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able
 to merge in stranger habits,more likely to be productive in his life,
moreover
,
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grasping
 new nation habits is the
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fastest
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 way to make new friendships in your
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neighbourhood
.
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instance
, another benefit to
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 learning outside your country. people who decide to go abroad have likely
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 to take
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responsibilities
responsibility
 more than those who refused to leave their cities. because
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 hardships that abroad
student
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students
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 faced while they seating in another nation, they will be able to solve and overcome problems in the future. the more time you spent abroad and solve difficulties, the more you being able to be in leadership places in the future. To sum up, more benefits
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 going outside your hometown
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 as learning new culture along with learning
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to be responsible.So I do not agree with youngsters who choose to study at home.
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