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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The chart below illustrates the variation in percentages of households with electrical appliances and the duration of time spent doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019. The percentage of households with electrical appliances showed a steady but significant rise over the period, while the number of work hours per week experienced a downward trend. In 1920 the percentage of
household
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 using electrical appliances
such
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 as washing machine and vacuum cleaner were nearly 40
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 and 30
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 respectively,
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 with the use of refrigerator was at zero
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. The
rate
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 of the refrigerator had increased sharply throughout the period exceeding the
rate
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 of washing machine in 2000 and reaching 100
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percent
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in
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 the end of the period. In the meantime, the percentage
rate
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 of the vacuum cleaner had a continuous upward trend at 100
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 by 2019.
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, there has been a significant drop
with
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rate
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 of
washing
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machine
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during
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 1960 to 1980 roughly around 10
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percent
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 and was able to gain
the
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increased
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nearly
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 75
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percent
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 by 2019. The number of hours per week/household in 1920 reached up to 50
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percent
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 with a dramatically downward trend starting in 1940 at 35
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percent
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,1960 at 20%, between 1980 to 2000 were 15
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 respectively, and
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 by 2019 at 10
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